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Sounds too synthetic (note: Not synthy) to me.

I understand. I kept the melody strictly in the 8note range of e minor

Bass part kept on repeating, and in the right hand part, the melody didn't make sense; weird syncopations here and there. Sometimes there wasn't any bass at all, where it could have been used. The sixteenth note pattern was sort of out of nowhere, then it just ended after 2 times. Then you tried to place some of the beginning in the end, which didn't help. :\

i will consider it

Yes, the melody was indeed not strong enough, as Clarinetist mentioned. And because the melody was not strong enough, your harmonization was also jeopardized by the melody. Your piece could also use more dynamics and musical nuances.

Do you mean not strong enough as if it can't be heard or it does not stand out.

Can someone tell me a good source on the web or a book etc. on composition.please

1) Not strong enough as in, the melody wasn't current through out the whole piece. A strong melody stays active throughout the whole composition, and you begin to recognize it. Think of it this way: When you get a song stuck in your head, it's always the melody that gets stuck. Yet with this song, it is hard to make out what your actual melody is. I hope this helped.

2) Look into the Composing General Chat topic inside the music department of this forum. (It should be pinned). In there you should find all the composition tips and thing you need there.

3) Please don't double post, there is an edit button for a reason :)

Thanks.

1) Not strong enough as in, the melody wasn't current through out the whole piece. A strong melody stays active throughout the whole composition, and you begin to recognize it. Think of it this way: When you get a song stuck in your head, it's always the melody that gets stuck. Yet with this song, it is hard to make out what your actual melody is. I hope this helped.



Not my point, but if you're striving to write music of the easy listening genre, then yes. What I meant was that the melody lacked a sense of musicality and direction. In another words, your melody doesn't make the audience 'feel' the way it wanted to go.

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