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Inuyasha_1052
August 8th, 2007, 02:25 am
It's about time I finished one so I finally sat down and finished an old favorite of mine. I appreciate all negative and positive comments. Thank you all in advance.

Sir_Dotdotdot
August 8th, 2007, 02:46 am
For a beginner composer, this is not bad. Perhaps you could've variated the main theme more and create even more harmony variation as most of the chords are pretty predictable. Your melody could also use more complexity as it's also quite predictable. Your ending chord could also be improved. However, what you did in the end was pretty neat; featuring the solo with light accompaniment.

Milchh
August 8th, 2007, 03:57 am
Hey, nice composition. As dot said, it is kinda predictable and all, but I still think it's pretty and I like the B section quite a bit. :)

The A section also really reminds me of an old composition of mine for two flutes with a piano accompaniment.

Good stuff, hope you post more. ^_^

Noir7
August 8th, 2007, 08:24 am
Really nice. The fact that this is your first finished composition proves that you have quite good compositional instincts.

Inuyasha_1052
August 8th, 2007, 03:03 pm
Thank you all for the feedback (sorry about the predictability of the piece xD) Heres a slightly diffrent one its a Sonata I wrote for a theory final last year that I notated using finale so heres it is Sonata op.1 no.1 in C-minor "Tragic Fate"

Darkened_Angel
August 8th, 2007, 05:21 pm
I dont really think it sounded like a 'Tragic fate' to me. All those different themes confused me as to what it sounded like. And a few of them sounds a bit familiar to me.

In my opinion it was a little too long. And would probably sound a lot better on a real piano.

a cool piece of music though

meim
August 10th, 2007, 03:21 am
It is a sonata so the lenght and the themes. I liked it, sounds fun to play on the piano. But it sound a tad bit too cheerful for a title like tragic fate. You even ended on a major. That is unexpected.

Milchh
August 10th, 2007, 03:40 am
But it sound a tad bit too cheerful for a title like tragic fate.

Hmm, the title has more of a meaning to the music than you think. . .sounds a bit pathetic, if you know what I mean.

Inuyasha_1052
August 19th, 2007, 02:42 pm
I've had this one up a few times but I made a few changes to the bass part. So here it is, the opening to the Mass in C-Minor. Kyrie.

cody/mccollaum
September 11th, 2007, 04:31 pm
I've had this one up a few times but I made a few changes to the bass part. So here it is, the opening to the Mass in C-Minor. Kyrie.

It sounds very pretty. I like this on more than the others but only thing I didn't like was the ending measure.

deathraider
September 14th, 2007, 10:29 pm
Having the raised 7th sung at the same time as the tonal center is played sounds really bad, in my opinion, in the context of the chord progression at times such as :23 and also when the vocal part first comes in.

Inuyasha_1052
September 16th, 2007, 11:35 pm
thank you all for your feedback (the Kyrie has since undergone some editing)
@deathraider: remember that sequences were heavily used in the long long time ago of classical composition, and while my piece may fall under the contemporary classification the sequence that I was going for was B-natural, C,D,E-flat. You are not wrong it does clash but it also resolves throughout thus brining the piece from my head to the speakers xD

deathraider
September 17th, 2007, 03:46 am
Actually, technically it doesn't resolve, so I still think it sounds really bad and that you should change the piano so it's playing the fifth. Hope you're not offended.

edit: Sorry for the lack of positive comments, the bulk of the song was actually really good, but that clash stood out as a stylistic inconsistency that sounded wrong. It's really not a big deal at all.

Inuyasha_1052
September 18th, 2007, 12:35 am
not offended at all i am still a newb composer by all technical standpoints i only have about 3 years of musical experince and maybe 1 year of composing so I love to know what im doing wrong :heh: