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poozer115
November 29th, 2007, 03:16 am
Well, I've been super busy lately, and haven't been able to write music as much regretfully. I believe I have matured musically however, here's what i've been working on. Autumn Barcarole is done, Sonatina in C Major only the exposition is yet completed, still have a ways to go. Thanks for your feedback!

Noir7
November 29th, 2007, 11:31 am
Autumn Baracarole has a pleasant feel to it. It bagan to grow on me during the half of the song and onwards, and I think with a slightly better arrangement this would appeal to many people.

Sonatina in C is my least favourite song of these two. I don't know why, but I was waiting for a nice brainy counterpoint to come in right after 0:11. I can't put my finger on it, but it simply does feel quite uninspired.

Nyu001
November 29th, 2007, 12:12 pm
I listen to it this morning, There was a very little part that remind me to mozart, it sounds that need to be filled a bit, I think if you improve it, it can get a better quality. But anyway that is what I am saying of what I can remember of what I thought this morning, still is morning but I am at college trying to not fall asleep. Waste of time. yawns

PorscheGTIII
November 29th, 2007, 12:32 pm
Autumn Barcarole

I liked the idea. It's a nice piece, though my ears wanted to hear some different chords in different places to make it more interesting. I'm thinking around 1:00 something more chromatic in the progression.

Sonatina in C Major

Interesting. Your melody, in my opinion, could use more skips in it. also, like Noir7 said, I think an introduction of a counterpoint would be a good idea too. The left hand as it is now leaves me in disappointment because it just seems too simple to me. We'll have to see how this one plays out.

Sir_Dotdotdot
November 29th, 2007, 10:16 pm
The barcarole somewhat got on my nerves with the repeating figure. Give it some more colour. Slow down some arppegios in certain chords, make other grace note arppegios, and etc... You have an idea, and how you expand on it is limitless, so don't just repeat the same thing over and over again. The sonatina was indeed too simple as mentioned above. It lacks the momentum to drive forward (in another words, there aren't much direction of where you want the piece to go). Middleground elements like counterpoints, and more harmonic elements would definitely help. Also, at :32, lead into that more vivid figure, it felt way too choppy. When you compose music, try thinking more than just melody and bass notes. You can add a lot more to it.