This is my first composition :D I had to do one for my music class at school.
I'm quite proud of it, though it's alot more creepy than I really intended it to be! Its for an alto, piano, violin and cello. It has words but since this is done on the computer, you can't hear them. Also, this track has 2 versions of the song on it, one with the voice, one without.

Please give me some critique, but not to harsh, I'm really still a beginner, as you can probably tell :heh:

thank you!

I think its rather good! I'd like to know the words to it(to see if they match with the feeling of the song).

Thanks!
If you've ever read Memoirs of a geisha, there's a japanese poem near-ish the beginning about a fish, I based my lyrics on that, this is a translation I found:
Go to sleep, you good flounder!
When all are sleeping
Even the birds and the sheep
In the gardens and in the fields-
The stars this evening
Will pour their silver light
From the window.

I changed it a bit so its about a child instead of a flounder, so it's kinda like a lullaby. Since this is just for school we're allowed to use poems and stuff for lyrics.

I might write some english lyrics at some point, just so I know exactly what's being said, but at the moment I'm focusing more on the music.

Isn't "flounder" kind of a metaphor for a child anyway? Is it really necessary to actually change it?

Oh! I didn't realise that :heh: I just changed the lyrics so they would fit the rhythm better, they're going to get replaced anyway. Once I've got the music how I like it I'll write some english lyrics.

This is my first composition :D I had to do one for my music class at school.
I'm quite proud of it, though it's alot more creepy than I really intended it to be! Its for an alto, piano, violin and cello. It has words but since this is done on the computer, you can't hear them. Also, this track has 2 versions of the song on it, one with the voice, one without.

Please give me some critique, but not to harsh, I'm really still a beginner, as you can probably tell :heh:

thank you!


Good job on your song. I would say your good for a beginner. I liked the tone and feeling of the song. I thought the song sounded more deep than creepy. I would say keep composing and try your own lyrics and see how they turn out.:lol: