Well I am new here and I guess I am gonna bring some of my compositions with me. I am gonna post my first song, "Adventurous" which I think is better fit as an MP3 since I wrote it kind of awkwardly. It was my first song that I ever completed so I hope it isn't too bad ~_~. I'll post more later.

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~Adventurous~

First off, I notice that your melodies have a very wholesome, "open" feeling to them. At around 1:28, when the rhythm takes off a little more, the title really fits. The ascending harmonies work very well here. Going into 2:00ish, though, when things slow down, I wasn't quite sure where things were headed, due to the constant shifting between several tonalities. The marchlike articulation around 3:00 is nice and playful, and provides a bit of a "wake up" from all the slowly-lingering harmonies from the past minute. Nice use of augmented imitation at around 4:05 (even if it's only a little short section). I'd consider developing this motif a bit more. (The pedal point here in the bass strings is especially nice, and you break with it just in time before tedium sets in.) Another retardation around 5:15, huh? Good way to set the audience up for the orchestral climax from about 5:40 onward is superb! The "outro" was interesting, too. Right when I thought you were going to end on one chord, you teased me and reiterated the same sonority a couple more times (with the upper strings finally ending on the 5th of the chord).

Overall, good material. You've made good use of chordal variety (not everything is perfectly tertain). Some things you might look into for future pieces are:
a) Think more about form (i.e. a section layout like A B A' C A, for example).
b) Look into voice-leading and doubling rules. Many of your chords (the last few, noticeably) have the third doubled, which leads to a kind of mushy, "weak" sound.
c) Consider coming up with more memorable melodic lines, which repeat themselves once in a while later on in the piece. This goes hand-in-hand with (a) above. This will leave listeners with some material to hum to themselves even after the piece has come to a close.

Personally, I don't know about the title. The piece has adventurous moments, but considering how long it is, it seems more majestic and noble than specifically "adventurous." That's just a matter of opinion, though.

nice song it was really long tho and it felt like it shouldve been divided into movements or sumthin im more of a symphonic band arranger so... Good song tho!

Thanks so far everyone. I am very happy you enjoyed it. The song was indeed long but it was more a compilation of Ideas than anything else. I know I need to work on establishing some type of melodic line better but I felt this song didn't call for it. And maybe Adventurous does not fit as a title but I'm not very good with english and I couldn't think of anything better ~_~. I also know about the doubling stuff too. Every time I doubled I did it for sound purposes. Some people feel that doubling the third is never called for but I feel if it is far apart enough then It is ok. I believe the two 3rds were two octaves apart so that is why I did it(this is without looking at the music so I may be wrong). I feel it gives a fuller sound when needed.

Well I figured I might as well post another piece. Its just a short piece based off a book I am working on. It's called, "Celsis' Theme"

I think you have some definite potential here! You have a great start, if these are your first completed pieces! However, with doubling of the third, I would agree with gnomish that it should be used sparingly, (especially in this new piece). I don't like this new piece as much as the earlier piece. I think it still needs more of a melodic line to give the character and the song some form.

Most definitively you have some great potential! Melodically your doing a great job, it's just with your harmonies that could use a little more attention. You see when you doubling the third,things start to sound too rich or mushy...one of the two :lol: ...because the third of the chord is what really "defines" the chord. Also, something just doesn't seem to sit right in your lower register. It just sounds all mushy (may be due to the third thing). Just try sticking to the base note in the base (imagine that XD ). Also, I would have liked to here more counterpoint in your composition or at least something a with a little more movement to counter your melody.

Nice dude! Keep bringing more music our way!