This is a song I composed in A minor. Yay I love a minor. Sorry about the ending there's a bunch of like sixteenth rests that I could not get rid of. :heh:
*hides behind wall preparing to be insulted at*

Don't worry! I won't insult you at least, just offer a little consrtuctive criticism.
There was some good elements here, but the problem I felt was that although th ideas were there, they all seemed a little juxtaposed, like afterthoughts added one on to the other. I thought the very beginning felt like the best section of the piece as it had movement, set mood, and felt like the piece was going somewhere. Bar 11 onwards, I feel the piece became a little weaker, lacking a sense of direction. Maybe, when composing in the future, try and use a form (I find ternary the easiest to use) so you can split your music up in to 3 clear sections, but still return to the 1st section at the end, which I feel may give your music more strength.
Also, the semibreve you have at the end, maybe I'd suggest using it as a minim as the last to beats of the bar before? It's just that it's length could remain the same, seing as it's got pause mark on it anyways. =)
I don't wantto seem like I'm pulling it to bits, but I gather that this isn't the finished draft (hemi-demi-semi quaver rests and all XD) but it would be good if you could move the spread chord lines to the left of the semibreves in bars 11 and twelve.
Dynamics in abundance in the first section- but what about there onwards?
Personally, I'd write all those Ab as G#. Just more conventional.
The end, c#'s? they're quite nice in places, but personally I'd return to the home key for the last chord, using a V-I cadence on the triplet. Just makes things sound more complete IMO.
Erm, I know I've gone on a bit, but you came for advice here right =D?
Hope this helps, I'm no expert, just a music student, so I'm probably spouting rubbish hehe

xx

P.S Don't know whether this is just me, but two more points:

-Bar four- 3 beats- where's the rest gone O.o
-bars 11 and 12- is that a phantom harpsichord on the right hand or are my ears going funny *scratches head*

Ooo, Finale '08...yeah...if you want more comments you'll need to post stuff in a more open source format like MIDI or MP3. :\

Me are a noob. I don't know how to convert to midi or mp3. Anyway I'm working on a new song for Flute and Piano. Maybe I'll have it in a few days...

file>>save as, select file type as MIDI.

i don't know if this is a mistake of my programme but in a minor there has to be a g# and not a flat a

hmm sry didn't see it was meant before

Hmm... interesting.

I will have to STRONGLY advise against using closed chords in the lower register of the piano, especially the way you used them. They just sound too dull down there and makes everything sound mushy.

Also, there was poor use of a maj/min clash at 16-17. It added nothing to the piece. In fact, it really detracted from it.

I will also have to agree with Penguin with your ideas seeming juxtaposed.

Keep trying. :)

As I said before, here's my piece for Flute and Piano. The first part is as though a person is biking while leaves are falling on them and the second part is like a person just sitting and watching the leaves fall.

It's a little unrealistic to put "ff" on Flute and "p" on the Piano, unless for some reason, the Piano is very overpowering. (Which is almost never the case. :\) Measure 2: there is also no reason to put a ">" (diminuendo) mark on the Piano while the Flute is doing a crescendo. It's making it seem as though there is no purpose for having the Piano play in the first two measures. Harmonies are not meant to never be heard; rather, they are to make the melody more interesting.

The transition from 8 to 9 needs to be improved; although you did try to make that transition with a trill, it needs some harmonies to make that transition more successful.

Measures 12 and 13: again, avoid the close spacing on the Piano's low notes; it creates a "dragging" effect, and makes it sound mushy. Harmonies do not always have to be closely spaced.

Sorry about the long delay in pieces. My computer was out of comission for what felt like the longest time, and I had to use the library's computer. Now that my computer is up and running again here's my newest piece.

It's nothing spectacular, but at least it's something. I just wanted to put something up. It's pretty much a Violin & Cello duet, which, unless you can play double stops well, you may actually need two Violins.