hello world :P
i finally decided to post up some of the stuff i've been working on. i'm a really slow worker, so all of this has taken me some time, especially because my computer can't get any slower x_x however, i did manage to get something out of it. i use Geniesoft Overture, so i cannot post up .mus files. if you use overture and would like to see the .ove files, then i can upload them for you. for the time being, tho, it's just gif's and midis. i will update them as often as i can. so far, i have written:
1. a piano ballad, "Adrift"
2. Estravaganza No. 1 (unfinished)
3. a choral piece, which i will upload later.

do keep in mind that these are midis, so the sound is pretty horrible. :heh: please comment as you like. i look forward to seeing some constructive criticism ^.^

Loved 'em both, especially adrift. Can't get tired of it. It's lovely, peaceful, emotional.
And that melody! You gotta love that melody. I can't wait to hear that next song you speak of, I wonder what you'll do with an orchestra. Sounds interesting.
I'm not entirely sure about the ending, it sounds like it'll continue but it suddenly ends...

Keep that up! ;)

:D
weee thank you very much!! yea i noe about the ending. the context of adrift is actually a rain of sakura petals flying through the air. near the end, i wanted to make it a little different, hence the upbeat section, pertaining to the flight of fallen petals towards the sky in a spiral form (similar to what happened in kung-fu panda. dunno if u watched it? xP) and maybe the flight of an observer with the petals...hehe...xD
the chords are kinda odd, i noe, but i couldn't think of anyother way to end it...

1) The ending in Adrift should only be altered with that bass note. I would just change that note to whatever the tonic is for the 9th chord you put way up top. My other suggestion would be to just make triplet quarter notes in stead of the two dotted notes then a straight quarter--it will, in this case, make the piece sound more adrift and flowing, than the rigid sounding of the dotted notes

2) There really isn't too much to say about estravaganza (or, extravaganza). it seems, kind of like in adrift, the rhythms are a bit too much (either it be complicated or just they will go into something completely different, and some what complicated.. ex: 0:50-end, it sounds very, very uneven which makes it sound like a random mess of banging.. try to clean it up a tad and you'll have something pretty good).

Overall, you have a good, basic concept of how the chords and melodies are written in your style, but your rhythms are interfering greatly, in which your pieces are destroyed-- that is my advice!

Extravaganza have a nice melody going on the right hand which I like. The left have I think need to be more clear and to interact in a better way with the right hand in the slow part. The second part shows to be stronger in rhythm. But the rhythm need to create a better and clear pattern that can give a solid base to the melody. Measure 15 and 16 have two impossible intervals to play.Too bad is not finished, I would have liked to listen to more of it. The style sounds familiar to me.

Constructive criticism!!! now THAT's what i'm talking about!! xD
*starts yay-ing and running around the room*
@Mazeppa:
do you mean i should change the bottom note so it's the same as the top note?? i should try it sometime... :P i dunno if u'v noticed but i use a lot of triplets... i thought the dotted eighth+dotted eighth+eighth pattern will spice it up a bit. That part is suppose to depict a person flying away with the flower petals (i dunno if u read my background info i posted later?) and i thought it might make that part sound more upbeat. but then again u are probably right... i will revise it, but i might be stubborn enough to keep that part...please don't be offended if i do!!
about estravaganza, yea i know perfectly well what you mean. in fact i believe it's impossible to play. i'v tried it myself. xD i promise u i will clean it up and make it more "humanly possible"... *-* also i dunno what i did to the playback but it's not as acurrate as it would be otherwise... hence the "banging"!! :D

@Nyu001
thank you! yes i write out melodies first then add on harmony... even though theoretically i'm suppose to write out the chord progression first... but anyhow, yes i am aware that some of the notes can't be played, and as i promised Mazeppa, i promise you that i will fix that up too. you'll get an update on it very soon... please stay tuned! xD

I feel that what you have for adrift works fine. It really just needs the emotional tempo variation you can get from an actual performer. I do really think that the emotion conveyed in this piece could be accented with a small string section, some bells/percussion, and a solo flute. Would you mind I I gave this a try sometime in the future?

Extravaganza on the other hand did not tickle my fancy. Some parts of the melody I was expecting to be moved by some kind of powerful emotion, but it didn't resolve that way and I felt awkward. I also don't think the way you harmonized the left hand in places really works with this piece. I also found the sudden half note octave jumps at measure 17 to be awkward. Maybe a jump upwards with more notes of the chord and less time to the start of the rest of the song afterward would make it feel better to me. I really did like where you were going after that. I wouldn't worry about it not being playable. I'm sure that a professional with practice could play it.

no probs! please do as u like with it... i'd love to hear how u would interpret the piece! :D
I was going for a dramatic transition in mood in estravaganza, from sad and majestic to fury and passionate. maybe i can add a short, harmonic passage in the left hand to make the half notes more interesting. thanks anyhow!

Estravaganza - Pretty neat song, sounds like the stuff in anime when a character is aruguing with their freind or something. xD The ending however, is very....bad. Sorry. xD I don't know if you typed in some wrong settings for playback or something, but it sounds more like random banging than music. Other than that though, I really didn't find anything wrong. Nice use of triplets btw. :D

adrift - I don't know why, but something at 1:05-1:10 sounds weird...maybe it's just me, sorry if it is. xD Maybe at 1:16-1:30 you can add a better left hand instead of low whole notes? I think that could really make that part better!