Here are two of them, in order of worst to best.

March of the Titans (http://gc.asylumgaming.com/upload/mott.mid)

Ivan the Terrible (http://gc.asylumgaming.com/upload/Ivan the Terrible.MID)

Feedback please! :D

Edit: I guess the bottom one doesn't work...oh well, just copy and paste it into your browser's address bar.

All I have to say is that it kind of seems really slow for a march.

Ya, I didn't think of the title. I'm changing it soon.

i dont quite like the ending of the first piece. It seems rather stupid and long.

But i do like the variations of the theme. I would personally take that theme

where the flute has those 16th note runs and make that all adagio to about

measure 80. Then i would have a key change bring it back to tempo.


Also FYI there are so many types of marches

1. Band

2. Funeral

3. Stadium

4. English

and so many more. But when I downloaded that piece i ran it through sibelius and

it sounds better when the quarter note equals 140

You have a very unique style, that's excellent! The songs have almost a Zelda flavor to them, but need a lot of refinement. I don't really care for the randomness of the songs, but there's something to be appreciated in that too. Ivan the Terrible seemed to be the better of the two, although the ending was pretty bad. :heh: A little more foreshadowing of the ending would have been nice cause it just kindof disappeared. However, you had some great moments in there with the sixteenth-note runs and ensemble sections.

You had a nice intro, but huge jumps in notes and volume (0:11; 0:21; others) created a stumbling effect. At 0:11 where the flutes made a sudden jump up, you could have extended the lower note, added a few more beats of silence, and began another phrase. This would have helped the mysterioso effect I think you were trying to get. Again, 0:21 could have had an extended note before the 8th note jarring awake and a longer silence afterwards. I say jarring because it is rather abrupt. You may wanna try adding a crescendo in the previous notes to that point to better prepare the listener. The whole intro seemed kindof rushed, so I'd slow down everything up to the strings entry.

At 30 seconds, you faded everything out and then brought back the flutes. At the fadeout, the energy is submerged so I was expecting another flute ensemble to build it up a bit more. However, going straight in to the percussion from there was kindof contradictory, like going from a jog to a slower walk and then taking off running. I'd suggest completely getting rid of the decrescendo and maybe doing the opposite, crescendoing into the percussion entrance. Just to maintain and continue building the energy. The trombone was nice until you started sliding everywhere. Even spoken from a trombonist, that was a little wierd. You might could try replacing the slides with sixteenth-note runs in horns or something. Just a solo trombone ruins the epic feel and makes it more like a circus chart.

The piece loses it's coolness at 0:50. A lot of slides and random melodies and rhythms which individually sound pretty good but don't connect with eachother at all. The main theme doesn't really seem to resume until 2:08 and then you end abruptly at 2:26 just when the song was starting to go somewhere. This ending is suspect though because it sounds cut off and may just be an error in the file.

The biggest thing I can say is connection focus. You have multiple themes being presented in the same song without any relation between them. To remedy this, try instating a common ground for a particular song. A background rhythm that alternates between brass, drums, and woodwinds is one way. Transitions are also good to use. You do a lot of jumping around in these pieces, almost to the point that a little cut and paste would fix the problems like putting together pieces of a puzzle. Consistency is the key. As your writing and switching between different sections, pay attention to the energy of the music. If you have any knowledge of Physics (I can't believe I'm saying this...), you could think of it as the sum of the kinetic and potential energy being relatively constant with changes occuring gradually. (That's it. Now I KNOW I've had too much schooling! @_@ )


I hope the above comments helped in some way. Once again, too much writing and probably much more than necessary! Ah well! ^^ I look forward to hearing more of your pieces. Keep me posted! ;)

Is there a way that i could rewrite parts of it with my interpretation?

I don't know if I should be reviving this topic, but I am.

ya, those songs are old. I have some new ones that are "better", and I might post them here soon.

If you guys want to have those in .mus files, or a transferable file (Finale does that), then I will be glad to do so.

I think MIDI is the preferred format, since most notators/sequencers can open it. Anyways, I just listened to your march; it sounds really bare with so much unison parts and parallel progressions. Try to spread out the chords somewhat in your future pieces, and use modulation instead of simply transponsing the notes in whole-tone steps.