Alright, so, I just started working on this song tonight, tell me what you think.
It's written for two guitars, bass, and a violin. Vocals will come eventually, as well as drums. I'm kind of stuck right now on it, 'cause I don't have vocals for it yet, so, I'm not sure where I need to go with it.

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Hey ^^

It's cool, but I would say it only feels like the intro to a rock song, so maybe start putting together ideas for a verse, if you're going for a traditional rock song structure that is. I'm not sure where you want to go with the song. Keep going though!! :)

I agree with what he said, but also try to be careful with the melody. Near the end I could hear what could either turn out to be something really good, or something that will just fall flat and get boring. It isn't a bad start by any means, but be cautious.

I just think its way too short for any sort of comments. The music is too vague, I got no idea what to make of it. If this was a speech, its like the speaker had only just finished introducing his name and, "it's great to be here".

I already told you what i thought of it on MSN, so where's your new version? =P

I hear good things, but as already stated it sounds much like a modern rock introduction. Try to deviate from the norm just a tad. It will make you smile when your done. ^_^

I HAVE RETURNED. This time, with a new thing I've starting working on just tonight and last night. Once again, it's just the beginning/intro. But I actually have a pretty good idea where I'm going with this one

BEHOLD. This is actually me playing it =p It's not mistake-free, but I did hit all the right notes. I just need to work on the dynamics of it a bit. It's really not very much (if at all) easier to play something you write yourself verses something somebody else wrote.

Hah, well done. Hopefully you can keep the song sounding this good for more than twenty seconds though, lol.

Alright, I've added a little bit more to it. Kind of went the bluesy route with it. I started to stumble a bit at the end too. Oh well though.


UP TO FORTY SECONDS NOW!!!

EDIT: Ugh. You can kind of hear where I edited it. I froze for like three seconds right before the double bass part, haha.

Alright, I've added a little bit more to it. Kind of went the bluesy route with it. I started to stumble a bit at the end too. Oh well though.


UP TO FORTY SECONDS NOW!!!

EDIT: Ugh. You can kind of hear where I edited it. I froze for like three seconds right before the double bass part, haha.

As a prior warning, I've gotten to the point in which I'm really picky about structural deficiencies in my own works and others'.

What you have started on :26 is what my teacher would call "the kiss of death." You're trying to add some sort of variation there - but what happens is your structure isn't sound and will end up in a repetitive mess - try to make an impression other than using tremolo figures in the bass that are just faster repetitions of the same note in the intro. What I would personally do at :26 is extend the phrase at :25 and emphasize the mood before repeating the phrase again (i.e. prolong repetition).

Thanks clarinetist. You're absolutely right. I was having a hard time figuring out where to go next with the last recording. Anyways, here is a new one. I really only added a few seconds so far, but that's kind of the way I work. I like to listen to what I've made a buncha times before I try and add to it. Let all possibilities float through my head, ya know? =p

Anyways, here it is. It's actually shorter 'cause I played faster, but whatever.

Everyone can ignore this post. It's just for HC

Cool piece (the piano one). I really like the first 8-note phrase (figure?). I think...it reminded me of some eye catch thing Time Warner uses for their movies before the actual thing starts? But maybe for development you could do something with the second four notes. Maybe something like...

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Because the four-note phrase is so simple, it's really easy to do some contrapuntal magic and see where it takes you. You could have a string of stepwise ascending chords harmonize the phrase in continuous inversions at the second. Also, maybe you could take a look at the Xam'd OST. Some of the solo piano pieces in there were reminiscent of your piece.

Here's a little somethin something I created today. I don't think I'll do anything more with it, but, figured I might as well share it.

i think if you play it a little slower... it might be more fluid.

I play it much better now, I always rush to record things when I should take more time to practice. Anyway, I'm too lazy to record it again.

i think you played fine... i just thought it should be alittle slower... heh.

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It's hard to comment on this since there is not any progress in the piece. The melody is very "static" as it sounds like is not going anywhere, just repeating the same pattern. Maybe you should try and create a more interesting melody and use this as a transition or something else?

You have some nice ideas there, but as Nyu said I'd try to develop it a little more. I suggest that this could be the intro to a piece, and then the little twinkling figure could be placed in the background while a more substantial melody is played in the foreground.

I really liked the beginning. It sounded like a start of a great friendship. hahaha. Weird, huh?