This is my first finished composition.

After some piano arranging, I thought I'd try finally composing something (and this also coincides with a theory class assignment, yay).

The main concern I have is that the melody isn't very interesting, but I suppose that'll improve as I get more practice.

Any advice?

Thank you.

It sounds cute, romantic and something else. I did not like how the sustained noted interfered, or maybe was the reverb? :think:

The melody is fine, I like it. You don't need to have a catchy melody always. The piece is nice. Well done! :)

Thanks, Nyu!

Romantic music generally have the deepest impact on me, so I try to compose in that style.

Which sustained note did you mean?

DUDE! i know what you mean by melody, but i didn't really care. i thought the piece was awesome. it sounded really crisp too. im gonna take a premature guess and say you played that yourself, if not, ohh hohoh... you got me. lol. it was very beautiful. very, orange and beige. haha. ok... maybe not beige, but something along that line. it wasn't too long nor was it too short.

it kinda has that oriental feeling around the end.

Which sustained note did you mean?

I meant the notes sustained by the sustained pedal.



very, orange and beige. haha. ok... maybe not beige

The piece makes me think of the colour blue. xD

By the way, was that a Roland?

Haha, I definitely overly rely on the pedal at times - something I'll need to work on by studying more works of others.

The piano is the Steinway that came with Garritan Personal Orchestra. In other words, I did not play this - it was completely computer synthesized. Unfortunately, I can't play nearly this well. :(

wow... must have taken you some time to implement the dynamics.

Gotank,

A very dreamy piece though it seems to start off a little rough! b^^

For fun I could see myself arranging this into a neat string or chamber orchestra piece! This also has some interesting progressions near the end. b^^

Either way, keep up the good work!

Hi
As this is your first finished composition I think it is very nice and romantic.
May I have your autograph please :)
Best of luck for your future.
Hope we will have your album in the market someday.
Don't forget your fan 1st fan

Haha, I definitely overly rely on the pedal at times - something I'll need to work on by studying more works of others.

The piano is the Steinway that came with Garritan Personal Orchestra. In other words, I did not play this - it was completely computer synthesized. Unfortunately, I can't play nearly this well. :(

Wow jesus this is all synthesized? I gotta check this out then...

I like it! I agree with Nyu001 about the pedal, though.

it started out ok, but it did not really hold my attention well.
Put some emotion into your music.

it started out ok, but it did not really hold my attention well.
Put some emotion into your music.
I hate to critique a critique, but I think you really ought to be more specific. What you wrote can mean quite a few things.


When you say the beginning didn't hold your attention well, it's usually good to give a reason why, and perhaps point out specific spots, time-wise, which you felt could use improvement. And when you ask for more emotion, it's probably a good idea to elaborate on how. For example, do you want him to add emotion through greater dynamic variation? Varying velocity (note attack strength)? Or perhaps tempo changes to emphasize cadences? etc. (All of which, I personally felt, he did very well)
My point is, there are numerous ways to achieve "emotion", a term which, used by itself, is rather subjective and doesn't convey much information without being elaborated upon.


Constructive criticism is very welcome, as long as it's not too vague. Hopefully you'll keep those points in mind and go into more detail on what you meant. =)

Put some emotion into your music.

Some people will feel it, others won't. Like with all the existing music. There are a lot of songs that drive people crazy and does not move anything in me. I don't think it's because the person did not put emotion into the music, it has to do more with my side. :sweat:

If you mean, dynamism, crescendo, decrescendo, ritardando, accelerando, accents and other musical marks that bring a piece to "life", oh ok, then. XD

Edit:

Solaphar went ahead, lol.

A simple way to add emotion to music is to vary the loudness (e.g. make it loudest at the culmination.. I hope you had one...?).
or add harmony to your melody at the culmination...

this is very good. keep up the good work. some lyrics would go very well with this.

I really like this song, it's been playing in my head ever since i heard it - the feel is real soothing. I feel it could be improved a little bit by varying the tone slightly more, there don't seem to be any particular loud bits except nearish the end and even then its not that loud as such.