Here's a piece that I was asked to work on for a friend who's making a short 15-20min film. It's more like ideas written in concert form and will most likely be the materials(theme wise if you can consider it that) to score. The mixing isn't perfect as my monitors haven't come in yet. Basically the film is about a detective who's solving an ordinary case until he sees a dead body and is eventually attacked. Hell breaks loose and just as things are about to take a turn for the worst; he wakes up safe and sound That's what's in his script so far and he's filmed about 5 minutes of it.

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it should sound good with some narration in the background. that's what i think. it could be a little slower, but i don't know what the clip looks like so i can't really say much more. don't get me wrong, but the end makes the piece sound meaningless, not so serious. perhaps that's good thing, but i think you can make it sound more meaningful, even with the same theme.

Thanks for the reply Ander! I guess my original intention was to have then end in which he wakes up to be a little 'over the top'? the effect may have worked too well in this case and borderlines cheesy. When you say meaningful you mean that the end kinda takes away and seriousness it may have had prior to it?

Some suggestions I would have may be to remove the hard attack that the guitar has throughout the opening of the piece. When you add the strings in they seem to have them forza or attack the opening note and decrescendo. Perhaps having them do measure/bi-measure swells to add a more pulling effect. Another part in question is that high string on top at around 2:30 and the solo violin doubling the piano. Perhaps an oboe could double the piano, not flute.... to bright... but that way you have a color change but not a mood change. Those would be my suggestions, also keep in mind the oboe should be no higher than a D above the staff for it to sound good but it is a though.

Sounds good, good luck with it! Hope to hear more!

Thanks for the comments and advice!Are you referring to the string harmonics around 2:30 doing the crescendo? I was going for a 'piercing' noise that I plan to use when the protagonist is starting to kinda tell it's a dream. Sort of like the "wake-up call". Maybe it does start to compete with the other strings in a similar register playing the melody. If that's not what you're talking about than I apologize. As for the solo violin, I wanted it sound a lot more expressive(tweaked as much as i thought I could) there but sampled solo strings aren't quite there yet from my experience. I thought about doubling with an oboe(among other instruments with the harmony) but i wanted to keep it simple...just a piano, guitar and a string section. Maybe gives it that 'old' Hollywood sound? That's what i was going for, but I will definitely take yours and everyone else's suggestions.

"cheesy" is the correct word.