Ok well, I finally got a good composition I think is worth working on... Here is what i got so far. Tell me whatcha think. Ratings are welcome. (Btw the title is going to be changed, I just thought of somthing fast so I wouldn't have to put No name :P)

i think it's a good start, but later on just dont' wander off, stick to this melody. It sound awakward around 10-14s

uh.... to me, it sounds like someone just smacking their hands on the piano.... maybe clean up the triads a bit....

I think thats a pretty good start. I think you should put a tad less sound on the left hand and I also think it makes sense to wonder off a bit as long as its not really different or itll be real boring.

I listen to it now, without looken at the sheet for it. The beg. is kinda loud, err, Sounded better on keyboard =\. Anyways, I gonna fix my beg, Or as a matter a fact, I like my middle better, So I am going to drop the beg. and do somthing better. After School....

5/10, there is no firm melody, waaay too much variation on the right hand, there's not much of a developtment throughout, and lacks substance.

You did a pretty good job with the introduction, but make sure your a bit more consistant with that, rather then jumping to something different so quickly. I know composing can be hard, but keep trying. I'm sure you'll do fine.

Ok A enhanced the Piece Broken Fall, (It is only 3 second longer though) It clicks better now. It's a duet now too. I changed the name to "Chasing An Ostrich" More feedback please. Though I think the end of this start is like before. Slow and boring.

Like Archangel suggested, you need lessons on harmony . . and in the parts where the melody is doubling itself, your harmony is weakened even further.

What do you mean, a duet? Sounds like only a piano is playing to me.

Alright, so you're chasing an ostrich in your song . . now use that to tell the "story". Use music to describe what's going on. That will give you a sense of direction and purpose.

Okay I Decided to start over. (this one sounds a bit better I think) Any how. The dynamics might not work. I don't know why, but they dont. Feedback plz.

Edit: Dynamics do work.

Wow . . you've improved very much since your last piece, I'm impressed!

Yeah, the dynamics are fine, except the pedaling may not come out right sometimes. Probably a computer problem . . anyways, your use of motive is good, but now try to expand on it.

okay, I thought my other songs where a disgrace to music. So I deleated. I felt so ashamed of posting them. So I rid myself of their presents.

next, I have been trying to clear up the pedaling a bit, but I either made it sound worse or empty. So I will try a little more, or Just leave it as it is.

uit sounds most wonderful. :D

keep your awsome work and when you get one more done you better post it :D

this song sounds just so "dreamy" as if I was like in a dream world and it's so relaxing. you have done a incredible peice and I hope you'll keep this talent~

8/10