Well, now that I learned a little about the western tonal system I tried, once again, to create a song... Transitions are a bit harsh, but that will be corected in time... Please post your comments (good, bad, or whatever)

well.. u know what's funny.. around 1:20 this song.. it sounds like my old song called "out of the box" and my friend told me that it sounds like the song from "Spirited Away" the animation. but one thing i learned from other talented composers dont put too many different melodies. have about 4 of 5 cauz you want the listeners to hum the melody after they listen to it. well... at least thats what im going for. what i do is i compose a song and if i have too many melodies... i cut them off and make another song. im not saying im better than u but thats what i learned during the 1 year.

I like the complexity of your beginning part . . could fit a movie or something. As for the middle section, it's not necessarily a bad thing to have lots of melodies. But still, quality over quantity. You can have as many melodies as you want, but make each one memorable.