Its called "The End"......hehe Enjoy...
Its been alooong time since ive composed so bare with me....Leave your comments if u like.

The end

Okay, if you haven't composed in awhile this wasn't half that bad. It sort've got off to a good start but some notes seemed out of place. Whenever you repeat 0:8 - 0:11, everything after that seems out of place and is actually . . . boring. -_-
So, this is basically just the same thing repeating itself.

Rating
Show spoiler (javascript:void(0);)<span style="display: none;" id="QUOTE"> 5/10
I would have given you mercy for not have been composing for awhile. But that&#39;s not my fault. Keep going though&#33; :) </span>

I&#39;d have to agree with Sarkurah =T . . but it&#39;s not that bad, I liked the subtleness and the soft mood . . your modulation is so unique though, that even though you repeat it, I get thrown off each time. I think it needs more structure . . but don&#39;t give up composing&#33;

Well if you notice i repeat the main melody but i changed it throughout the song....so yeah. I thought the main melody was perdy. lol Thanks tho. :lol:

I think you repeated it too much, without actually developing it that much while doing so... anyways, the harmony needs serious work; you can really should do much more with left hand instead of just droning along playing a rather weak bassline. Also, there are parts where parallelism in the chords make it sound weird and contrasting too much from the general feel of the piece. The part that stood out to me the most was that neat cadence into g-minor, but it doesn&#39;t really work well as you have it now. I&#39;ve attached two possible solutions- 1. Just make the 1st bar of the phrase g-minor as well, or if you don&#39;t want to change that measure, 2. you can make the next measure harmonized in E-(dimished 7th)major, and then go back to A-(diminished 7th)minor. Anyways, this piece can be a lot more interesting than it is; try add more (non-clashing) harmony with the left hand and work out the melodic phrases better.

hmmm that sounds cool. I&#39;ll work on it right now

here.......better or worse??? prolly worse right? -_- arg....i jus dont know what to do with this peice.....

et voila......

well.....here is another new version...if anyone even cares.... -_- I think this is too blunt but.....

et voila.....

I don&#39;t know, for what it is and what its style is, it&#39;s pretty good, not much more you can do with it. Unfortunately, I can&#39;t tell how much you&#39;ve improved, because I don&#39;t have the time nor the skill to analyze all the versions you&#39;ve uploaded. And I can&#39;t think of anything to say to help you improve (everybody else&#39;s comments seem to be really informative), except to expand your ending. You can&#39;t just end it on a chord like that.

Yeah, i was thinking about adding something to the ending cuz it jus seemed real blunt and short. Yeah i know it sucks. lol I tried guys i tried.... -_-
I&#39;ll fix the ending and then i will try and think of a new name.
Any suggestions for the name? cuz this one is hard to name.

alright and here is the final product..... Tell me how much better it is. I added an ending and uh yeah i couldnt figure out a name so yeah.

here is a Tomb Raider theme remix i made awhile back.....I think its good. Its one of my best songs i think. well here ya go...

The End:
I&#39;m glad you haven&#39;t stopped working on improving it. I&#39;ve noticed nice little changes. Your conclusion still needs more effort though =T adding those three notes at the very end isn&#39;t enough in my opinion. They seem out of place with the rest of your piece . . what I mean by expanding your ending is for you to lead into it, let us know that your piece is going to end, so that it&#39;s not unexpected. Good job on the rest of the piece though&#33;

Tombraider:
I love the introduction, great mood set-up. I almost feel like I&#39;m in the jungle on a mission with Lara, hehe. I haven&#39;t heard the original song which you based the remix on, so I can&#39;t judge any further.

Well, "The End" still has those jaggedy sounding chord changes, but I suppose to each, his own. It still sounds pretty close to the first revision, and looking at the length, it doesn&#39;t seem like you&#39;ve added much additional material. But if you can&#39;t get a piece sounding right without rewriting/adding a lot of stuff, it&#39;s usually best to let it be, and concentrate your efforts on newer compositions. That&#39;s my two cents.

On the other hand, the Tomb Raider remix sounds pretty solid. I don&#39;t really remember the original, so I can&#39;t judge it in comparetively, but piece flows pretty well for the most part. The sustained strings at the transitions sound a little too long, though; maybe you can shorten it, or fade it out slowly.