hello and first off im sorry to make a new topic but hey! I realy need help to get better so plz help me






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Not bad. I like it though. I'd give it a 8/10....... ^_^

you dont need help your doing fine. keep practicing. I would give that song a 6/10. I would give it higher but i think that the left hand of the piano should do something different than what it does in the whole song. I think you should put drums in place of that hand and make the hand do something different. because it gets kinda old near the middle of the song.

but very very good for a first song.

Way better than my first X_X.

Like i said practice and dont give up. you will get better.

Nice job so far =)

Hmm, I think you need more than a pedal point harmony . . as for your melody, you have good phrasing, but the notes seem a bit random, in that they're hard to follow (if one were to memorize your tune). And like badgerglue said, your left hand could use a variety, and this can be matched with different harmony. But I liked it when the second voice came into the melody. Keep on practicing!

thz all i'll tell me friend because he help me a bit so thz again like you all said i'll gett working snif snif in so happy

Originally posted by badgerglue@Mar 20 2005, 09:26 PM
you dont need help your doing fine. keep practicing. I would give that song a 6/10. I would give it higher but i think that the left hand of the piano should do something different than what it does in the whole song. I think you should put drums in place of that hand and make the hand do something different. because it gets kinda old near the middle of the song.

but very very good for a first song.

Way better than my first X_X.

Like i said practice and dont give up. you will get better.
there us ni piano it's a tampini

Very good!! :lol:
I like it very much!

You mean, it should've been timpani instead of piano there?
Like this?

//D

yep it give it a more strong harmony i thing for me


thz alot but the music like stop in the midle lool like the flute stop like pouffff

Ah well.. sry about that. I didn't notice that until now.
This was just a suggestion... I don't know how you want it.... :unsure:

//D

niiice!! the strings and the timpani give it more of that "angel of death" feeling and the flute is gorgeous (sp? o wellz). Thats a good step up from the original

don vercetti thz for the ex: i like it like that. i dont mind for the stopping i no it`s just two show us an ex: fob thz alot i like your posted but is the name good for the song i would like to no thz all for taking time you comment me

I think the name fits.

whoah that was a big jump! sounds way better with the strings and timpani. It's the chords from the strings which bring out your tune a lot better. So what you can learn from that is that having an instrument to back your main tune makes it sound better. I like the song. It's great for your first attempt!

DV, how did you manage to edit it just by using the midi?

Umm............

Sorry to say this, but this song is from .hack//sign. In fact, you can get it from Ichigos http://ichigos.com/music/midi/hacksignforeigners.MID << theres the link. Look under .hack//sign in anime. Its called foreigners.

You shouldn&#39;t do stuff like that, its not good, people will get angry at you. Especially since it&#39;s someone else&#39;s peice that you&#39;re claiming as your own.

^ Wow, I didn&#39;t think it was that good anyway. Next time you plagarise, pick a good song.

wow you did plagarise. :o

haha, holy shi*&#33;. hey are there alot of these ppl? but he isnt plagiariarize unless he was the one who made the song for hack sign, but what are the odds for that....

ohhhhhhhhh sry guyz i didn&#39;t no that my friend took it from there cauz i dont no eee hack/sign so im very sorry al for taking your time

I can&#39;t listen to the Hack:/sign song. However, if this song really is copied or not on purpose, this thread should be taken off immediately to avoid more problems.

yes you are right but im still sry and now my friend is in big trouble now so thz

I really don&#39;t understand how "your friend" ties into this.

are u saying that u took it from your friend and put it on here (saying its your own) or are u saying that ur friend put it on here? because if u took it from your friend to put on the both of you are plagarising because your taking it from him/ or her who also took it from the site.

If this didnt make sense im sry

ok now i&#39;ll try to explaine it my friend helped me do a song he HELPED lool me and he took the song for hack but i didn&#39;t no and he starded by giving me some one the song to i type it on my prog. i ivented stuff but i didn&#39;t work so he go more of the song like piece by piece and i wroth it and finaly i posted it hire so its no my friend song he only help me do it and im still very sryy guy sry sry
i will never do this again why would i do that im not a stealer man that wrong so now maby its clearer

i will have to agree with badgerglue if you are plagarising this song you sould take it out.

we established that it was plagarising already and she explained,she didnt know. All she has to do is edit the attachment out. no big deal @_@

It´s a very nice song, but remember so change the chords when you get
further into the song. Good job for your first song.

Remember, You must keep the listeners interested. So maybe change the melody a little, give a story. Hum, get what I´m saying :heh:

It´s a very nice song, but remember so change the chords when you get
further into the song. Good job for your first song.

Remember, You must keep the listeners interested. So maybe change the melody a little, give a story. Hum, get what I´m saying

I thought we went over this its not hers.

it&#39;s certainly true that Kaileena didn&#39;t write this in the very least... so the entire point of this thread was to hear the infinitely more interesting arrangement by Don Vercetti... blissfully unaware it was plagarized (yes, I&#39;m american), he made it sound better by changing the INCREDIBLY boring 5ths in the left hand... but... ah... Kaileena, could you possibly work on your spelling before I have to get a n00b translator?

what is the problem with my spelling lool i no im not that good but still lool well ok i&#39;ll the song

Hmmm...I personally am more offended by the fact that someone took the song and turned it into a score before adding his own bit in to make touches to it, before putting it back into a sound file. Couldn&#39;t you classify that as plagarism? That worries me that someone can do that. :angry: At least the first wasn&#39;t intentional.

I think we should get things back to where they&#39;re supposed to be, and so . . Kaileena, do you have a new song to show us? =)

I am still very sorry for the song and for al all give you an other one but this one is not a copy of a real sog ok but for now i dont have any thing to show lool