To be brutally honest, this is the fifth song i've ever written, so bear with me. I've only been doing this a day, go easy on me, plz. Tell me how i do! Thanks :D

you need to practice on the melody and bass part just keep practicing that is all i can say and don't give up.

ok. i have a couple of suggestions.

1. use some more rests. having it go forever is kinda boring.
2. try not to just point and click where ever. try and make a solid melody. and trust me i know. when i first started i had no melody in any of my songs.
3. practice makes better. but perfict is impossible. :lol:
4. have fun
5. keep trying. even if ppl dont like it or do like it.

Well it is one of your first songs so just keep at it. You should try to find a melody it sounds it bit random. Or find a chord progression and work from there. Eventually with time and hard work youll develop. Im still trying to learn all I can myself. :heh:
Also try tutorials on the internet or there are some here I think. ^_^

Thank you for the advice I tried again and would like your opinion. I added rests here, so it doesn't go on for so long...I hope it's better, thanks all :D

a little better but dont guess.

That's.. random. I can't say it's good (considering it's your 5th song after all). You're not doing very well with the technique you're using. You should try to play some basic classical pieces to get you to understand how a composition is structured before you create something yourself.

Don't guess? What? I don't understand :doh:

Would you please be able to post these as MIDIs? It'd be much easier! :)

I would, but i don't know how. I don't think I can, even.
:blink:

Ok, because I'm using Finale 2004 and they aren't viewable by me. :unsure: Any volunteer able to turn them into MIDI? :)

the one i use is 2005, or so it claims. i don't know, though :blink:

ill change them to midi. u have to have the notepad 2005 plus to change them.

the other

When he said dont guess I think he was trying to say it sounded random. As noir7 said you should try to study other songs classical or whatever.

mysadsong

This song is very random, but the instrument choice is pretty cool if you ask me. However, I'd strongly urge you to look into how to PHRASE a piece and how to compose a strong melody. If there were a strong melody, it'd be much easier to listen to. I'd also suggest trying some alternate note values, IE eighth notes once in a while, or dotted quarter notes, maybe? It'd make it just a little less robotic and forced.

ashke

Pretty much the same as the last one, but this one did use some more musical technique. You sure do like the harp, don'tcha? I like how the lower and higher parts of the harp sort of play off of one another, but they are dreadfully random at the moment. I'd look up music by King Henry VIII or Enya and use a MIDI conversion program such as MidiNotate to help you view what makes a good song. It'd spice up your songs a lot the minute you learn about chords, chord progressions, melody, and harmony! :)

This is sort of like what some of my first songs were. I hope you do much better in the future, and I'm sure you will! It just takes a lot of practice. :)

Well, I got some guidelines, I think this one is a little better... :unsure:

I THINK I'VE FINALLY FIGURED IT OUT. Oh, and I use the harp so much because it's so pretty and i'm trying to stick with what i know. listen to this one, i think i've got it!!!!!!!!!
:heh: Oh, yea, and badgerglue will change it to midi for me :D

Erm.. What did you *finally* figure out?

u know noir7 i think were trying to get better. and where not getting better with u being so mean...so plz if u dont have a nice comment to try to help us then plz dont say anything at all... -_-

and i made the last song midi...

I agree, Constructive criticism !!!! No meany comments that just pushes the self-confidence down. Instead just write what needs to be improved, negative and positive sides, melody, left hand etc.

That´s all from Mr. Blombrink :drool:

thz for agreeing

I was asking him a question, christ.. =_=

In my first reply I gave him my suggestions. I don't want to go in-depth and tell him what to improve regarding the left hand, melody or structure/form of a composition - becuase as he said, he's a beginner, he won't understand what I'll tell him most likely.

There are two kinds of fat kids. The one who get a "aww... that's okay, don't worry what the other kids say about your weight!" and the one who realize he/she is fat, and get off their lazy arse and do something about it.

I'll tell you right now, the latter kid will lose weight and gain self-confidence.


Originally posted by Blombrink
I agree, Constructive criticism !!!! No meany comments that just pushes the self-confidence down. Instead just write what needs to be improved, negative and positive sides, melody, left hand etc. That´s all from Mr. Blombrink

Which part of that, Mr. Blombrink, contained constructive criticism?

Noir, first of all I'm a girl, and second of all, i am sick of you being so mean to everybody. Just because you're talented doesn't mean everyone else knows what you do or will do as well as you do. I've been at this for about 3 days now, and I'm working on it. So is everyone else. The point of my posting is to ask for advice, not to get told i suck in nice words. Got it? :bleh:

Fine, I&#39;m sometimes blunt when I type, so what? I did give you a suggestion, so eat it up and spit it out <.<

Okay this is off topic lets move on. Noir7 did offer his help and suggestion and didnt REALLY say anything THAT mean. He just doesnt really sugar coat anything, but I really hope that ALL your music noir7 can back up what you say about everyone.
Your some what right about losing weight and gaining self-confidence, but
I do know someone who lost weight and ended up making fun of other overweight people kind of like what you did.

Back to your song :D

Okey back too the song.
Of all the song you have made, I can´t really hear a melody. And what you play with your right-hand doesn´t fit with what you do on your left-hand. Meaning that....do a melody and try to make it sound like a song using your left-hand (not random). Look at the other threads and listen to other compositors music, or listen to maybe classical piano music maybe....to get Inspiration. :rolleyes:

Please.....make a melody, no random tones :neko:

oooooooookay, this is a working on it piece and I think I&#39;m doing better. I&#39;m getting help from a friend. :whistle: Soooooooooooooooooooooo tell me if I&#39;m doing better....thx

erm......Like I said, there has to BE a melody. Right now I heard a few tones put together, and then just added some bas-tones. Listen to any , I mean any good piano music (I can recommend Final Fantasy music :) ) , and then analyze that piece and start over.
You´ll here that there are more bas-tones than melody tones.
I´m looking forward how you make your next song.

Keep working :rolleyes:

Umm, they all sound the same.
There&#39;s no melody, no rhythm, sounds like you just put in random notes.
You may thing I&#39;m being harsh, but this isn&#39;t really music =/

Um, well, I&#39;m no expert at writing music or anything...I&#39;ve made only a few compositions myself. :heh: But I couldn&#39;t help thinking theses songs...boring. Nothing I would really want to listen to over and over again. Try to add a few more interesting parts...

Maybe you should try using the ol' A-B-A structure, it should help you alot. Then, you could somehow link them together, with a passage. This will give the comopsition a feeling of development - that it goes somewhere.