This is my new thread and I will welcome any comments... what ever they may be. :heh:

It was O.K. I didn't really get into it, though. Maybe it was a little TOO slow. :unsure:

I didn't love it. The left hand was kind of boring, and the melody wasn't all that catchy, and it didn't really have flow.

This is one of your better pieces, in my opinion. There's a lot more variety when you start modulating more, ehh ;)? The sequencing kind of feels unpolished, like it was almost improved, though without the humanized playing. The harmony feels very appropriate for a "night theme" - the melody doesn't really persist, but it's still pretty enjoyable because it adds a nice consonant/dissonant voice to the left-hand chords. Great job!

I agree , this song wasn´t good. Boring melody and even more boring left-hand. I think it´s the left hand that littlery destorys the melody.

I am working on a new song and hopefully it isnt boring. :heh:

I agree with spc1st and I think it would make great BG music, it's not very "strong"... like kind of inconspicuous :hey:

here is my new song.

This one wasn't very good, I think. :mellow: There were too many awkward pauses and rests (especially with the Choir noises).

A walk through the stars

Quasi-oriental sound, I detect. The pedaling may be a bit excessive, but I like the simplistic melody. At times, it seems just a bit random, but I can see in retrospect what you meant to do with the song's form. With practice, you can improve far beyond this, but it's a good first impression.

lost soul

Good chord progression choice. I like the lower harp part especially, and the voice part is nice. However, the pauses every other measure in the vocal parts rather segment it in an unpleasing fashion. Maybe this would sound dozens of times better if you had a real female vocalist singing along to it. I do like how the ending trails off little by little betwixt grand pauses. Leaves me not knowing what to expect -- neat technique!

Keep on chuggin' along!

I'll try to fix lost soul and thanks for comments. :heh:

I Finally finish my new song and it took me awhile :heh: Well here it is I couldent think of a name for it so I just named it untitled :sweat: I will welcome an comments and advice. :D

Some of the guitar chords weren't very good, and, If I'm not mistaken, some of those chords were used as quarter notes. :\

That's a no no for guitar (most of the time it is advisable to use eighth notes). Also, on a guitar, it is better to use some flourishes or sweeps, or at least something.

Just trying to help you out. ;)

Thank for your comment marlon i'll keep it in mind when i use the guitar.

Here is a song for a game that i've been making.

That's some pretty good BG music. Something sounded wrong at about 0:31, but it being background, I'm sure no one would notice it in a game. ;)

Here's another one of my songs.

Broken Dreams so pleace tell me what you think.

Well im back and here to stay. Its good to be back on ichigos.^_^ Well heres a song I been work on. Comments would be helpful.;)

This is very nice, it sounds like a forest bgm.

(Just like my music), it needs climaxes, unless it's meant for a video game or something.

Yes, very bgm-ish.

Well it been awhile since I was on ichigos but I have a new song Ive been work on its not done yet but feedback is welcomed.^_^ Its called Dew forest hope you enjoy.;)

I think Dew Forest is very appropriately named. It sounds like background music for a foresty scene. I very much enjoyed it more than your other compositions, I found it very relaxing. Perhaps it is also because it's not a midi and the sound quality has changed? Anyway, I found Dew Forest to be very soothing.

on another hand, what program are you currently using? (the sound quality is fantastic)

When the harp comes in, it ruined the quality of the piece; it was too loud. Also, at that point on, all your melodic instruments lost its melodic directions. The recording was rather synthetic, hence I disagree with what's said above. Perhaps you need to give the strings some better parts other than just long boring held notes. And perhaps your ending needs to be justified.

I liked this thoroughly! It bring me mental imagery of FF-games I've played, and the fact that the instruments don't sound 'real' contributes to the VGM-feeling. Is it going to loop? That would be most appropriate for a piece like this one.

Excellent.

Mmm, definitely reminds me of Secret of Mana (Seiken Densetsu 2) music, which Secret of Mana is definitely one of my favorite games of all time.

Thank you all for your commnts. And yukiyoma I used final 2007 also noir I was planing on looping it but I still feel it needs to be twiked alittle. And again thank you all for your comments.:)

The forsaken was a really nice tune! I have a few things I would like to ask of you though, try swaping the chimes for something else and make a part in the song stand out a little. If this is suposed to be a song that plays over a long time and you dont want the listener to notise the musik this works well. I try to add something in songs like these that makes the listener want to listen through the song over and over again just to hear that part. maybe you could change the bass-chord that goes on throughout the song at some point and add a new part.
Try that. Hopefully I helped you out or encouraged you in some way.

nice work:)

ps: just noticed that there was one more page in this thread so..

Dew Forest: magical song, thank you for making my evening. this will be in my playlist for a while now =)