I think i may have discouraged people from my stuff by only posting old comps...so heres a semi-new piece (written about...2 or 3 months ago) I'm working on for a band I'm in. In addidtion to what you say, i'd like to know if this is just a lost cause and should start anew. Ps: i did not name it :sweat:

When I first saw the sheets, I immediately knew it was going to be random and unstructured. Your left hand is obviously just put there with a click-and-try kind of way. The melody too. With a title like that (Enchanted Love Wordless) the listeners expects something epic, romantic and timeless. Your song gives out the opposite feelings.

My suggestion would be to take a look at some other people's composition on this forum (such as Al's "Alone", which is well structured and planned out).

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is this more structured?...or no..
i really need a lot of practice , but hopefully ill get better eventually...

well..it wasnt to bad...but needs some work..personaly i dont like the sudden pauses with the fermadas (sp)...

Both of these suffer from opposite problems: Enchanted Love Wordless is a little too unpredictable-- though every piece should be whimsical to a certain extent, taking it too far (as in this piece) takes away from the effect. Expository Betrayal, on the other hand, is overly repetitious, and the chord expression is obviously uninspired. >_> I will say that the second piece had a sort of Latin flare that I liked, but that doesn't seem to fit the title at all. X_X

Oh well... These two compositions are probably your first and second foray into the realm of composition, so I can't say much more than that. However, in order to become a prosperous composer, you must be willing to experiment with strange chords and strive for simplistic, readily hummable melodies; that combination will seem odd at first, but it will eventually grow into something great. :D

The second one is better... but you gotta crank up the volume on violin or something. I get frustrated trying to listen to it.

i dont know a lot of theory, either, so i guess that really doesnt help, but thanks for the critique