Hello, I´m back with my composition! :heh:
I will post here new and old composition songs from me and I hope you enjoy it and give me a vote how good my new songs are. :)

Here are the old songs:

2 other old songs:

here 2 old songs:

A old song: I fix up the part around 0.43-1.05.

here a old song again:

Here are the new composition songs from me:

Here the second new song: I will post new songs... in few days.:heh:

Very soothing music. I really don't know what to fix. They're really good.

Oh yeah, one of your old songs have a background almost IDENTICAL to the background of a song in Tales of Symphonia.

Keep up the great work.

Neat. try composing something classical. im about to post an impromptu for fun ina bit.

...I'm blown away.
You just became my 2nd favourite composer on this site. :)
(First being Noir7... coincidence?)

They're great, Noir.

Very soothing music. I really don't know what to fix. They're really good.

Oh yeah, one of your old songs have a background almost IDENTICAL to the background of a song in Tales of Symphonia.

Keep up the great work.

which song do you mean? i really love the music in tales of symphonia:sweat:

great job! (I haven't more to say, I'm a begginer)

Hey Im back with new compositions songs from me and I thank the people who post comments in my topic here.

I hope you all like the new song, because I think it´s one of my best song i ever compose and please give me some comments about my songs.:heh:
The song is call "Nox Lacrima" and it´s a long song. I compose it 5.02 minutes long.:sweat:
I will post new songs in few days.

Very soothing music. I really don't know what to fix. They're really good.

Oh yeah, one of your old songs have a background almost IDENTICAL to the background of a song in Tales of Symphonia.

Keep up the great work.

Which one?? I cant tell...

But these are excellent some of the best ive ever heard. Congratulations your one of my favourite;)

Mmm... I like this song... No, that came out wrong... I LOVE this song... ^_^

ALright, here is a new composition song from me.
It´s call "No Love", because it´s a sad song. ^_^ The instruments are Violin and Piano in this song and it´s 4:30 minutes long.
I hope you like this sad song and enjoy it. :think:
And please give me some critics about my new song.

@ yousee: Thank you for the compliment. ^_^

@ Marlon: Wow, I thank you for the compliment. I´m so happy, because
you Love my songs. :lol: Hope there are more people
who like my music style ;)

I will post new songs in few days/months. :heh:

Great instrumental for nr.12 No love. The piano makes a very romantic setting. But make sure the instruments stay soft. GR8 job.

Hello again. I´m back and hope everyone´s well.
Now I have some free time to create new composition.
So I´m going to post some recorded songs and I hope everyone
enjoyed my music ^^.

The first one is call "Blue". However I didn´t record an ending, cause of some problems on my Pc. x_x
And the second one is call "Improvisation 2".

feel free to reply/critasize :P

Phoi

I don't see anything but the Blue and Improvisation one. Is it my computer or did you edit out the songs? I want to hear no love! I love piano and violin instrumentals and it says your a Yuki K. fan. ME TOO! I love her instrumentals.:lol:

same problem here...

hmmm sounds like music you hear when you go to supermarket sorry to say...

I disagree...I think it sounds like something they would play in the Chinese restaurant I used to work at. I think it's rude that you would say "sorry to say", though, facorrigan; that's shouldn't be a bad thing.

I think both pieces transmit a melancholic/sad feeling. I like both pieces and the fact that did not sound robotic.

@moonstaff324 and KaitouKudou : Well,I didn´t edit out the songs but I guess they were automatically deleted---> old songs 2005 ^^. Nevermind,I could upload them again.

@facorrigan: I disagree. I´ve never heard such music when I go to supermarkt but it´s ok. It´s your opinion :think:

@deathraider: I agree. My songs sounds a bit like asian music :heh:

All in all I thank all of you for all the comments. :)

Alright, I post more songs and I hope for further comments.

The next song is called "Memoria". This is a recorded piano song.
The other one is called "Aspiration". It´s a old song, which contains piano, violin and flute as instruments.
Please enjoy them and feel free to comment :lol:

Phoi

Memoria-- I really would like to hear the melody a lot more in this piece. It's recorded, so I know it has a human touch (even if it isn't an acoustic piano). I feel that the piece should be fairly in tempo, and not have too much rubato; it's amazing what a piece can sound like, such as this one, when it is played straight through and the melodies, harmonies and sound-quality (better described for an acoustic piano) shines through. Clear the sound more with the piano, because the dissonance doesn't do the nice sounding harmonies well. Now, keep in mind, I like to practice my pieces 100% dry, no pedal. Then, I add pedal to colour the sound, and not to connect the notes, however, some jumps needs to be colored and melodies can be fluttered even.

Obviously, you're being critiqued on you playing the piece rather than the piece you wrote itself. It was fairly unmemorable, as we all can admit, and there is not a melody from it I cannot distinguish let alone remember; the chord progressions worked, but they are so over-used in the first place, that I could never feel fully interested and wanting to hear what's next. Sometimes listening to a MIDI file with no pedal and the left and right hand layered can do a world of good for the realization of what you really want to be noticeably heard. Maybe some counter-point-esque melody will come out in the left hand, but still, do not make it more above the level than the right hand, don't even equal it, maybe just make sure it's there and phrased 'correctly.' Good luck on your editations, I am looking forward to more from your playing and short piano pieces.

Aspiration-- Right in the beginning, make sure your chords in the piano smoothly move into one another good leading voices. And make the Violin a little quieter; match the flute. When the triplets came in, any melody you had was lost. And that part after the arpeggio in the piano felt very random. It's very slow and not quite as moving... I can see what the piano is doing, but the Violin is playing a very random melody. Overall, your counterpuntal patterns just aren't fitting very well. They just seem like these wavering sounds and just aren't sound 'correct' within the piece's overall intention.

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These two pieces are an effort of putting things into Finale (or whatever program you use) and thinking they are okay and putting them on the internet to review. I feel that you can do better than this, otherwise I wouldn't bother to write all of this for you. It's good to write a lot, yes, but take a few days off from it, get your mind away from it. After maybe 3 days without it, listening to the whole thing through, not looking at the score/music. You'll find what you actually like, wherever you like it, and places where it just needs a change or something else. Try it sometime; the quality of your music will change drastically when we give your critical-musical brain a chance.

Good luck, sir-- I am looking forward to more.

Ok I had another listen, still sounds like music from supermarket. did you play it or enter notes into computer ? it is very flat with no punch, did you adjust the velocity ? or?

Memoria - Simple, graceful, flowing, beautiful. This would be great atmospheric music for a high-end restaurant or a formal party or something. I loved the sus2 you had at the end, and the chord progressions were great. As Mazeppa said, it wasn't that memorable, but I don't think it needs to be. If you took his advice and played it with less rubato, a melody would shine through as he said, but I think that's something this piece could do without. It's fine as it is in my opinion.

Aspiration- Such elegant romantic piece. I just wish I could hear the flute louder, the overall volume is a bit low for the average listener. Still, beautiful piece indeed. You have a touch for romantic oriental music, I was picturing a chinese woman thinking his man -yet to return- aside her window, seeing how autumn is slowly arriving, again... until it finished. It finished too abruptly I believe. But it is hard for a song to cause such imagery on me, so good job on that.

"Aspiration" is missing that 'high' which a great composition should have, if you know what I mean. Other than that, I think it's really good. Even though I'm 7 times more Noir than you are, I think this song is well on its way and that the major problem with this is actually the recording itself (which has nothing to do with composing, but still an important part of composing music). Is it done with sound samples or with a live recording? If it's the latter, ask someone more experienced to help you out because this tune is too good to be ruined by a bad mixing session. If it's the former, cut the special effects and go with simplicity =]

Now I´m back after a long trip and hope everyone is alright here :heh:

First, I want to thank you for all the comments and hope I´ll get more advice for my composing. So I could gain more experience to improve my music pieces, because I don´t have much knownledge in music theory. ^_^

@ Mazeppa:
Well, I hope I could follow your good advice so far as I could and I´m also being thankful that you spend so much time on me :sweat:.

@Noir7:
Firstly, thank you for your advice and your right. I really need someone more experienced to help me out the piece "Aspiration"... Hope I will find soon the right person @_@


Furthermore I thank the rest and hope you continue enjoying my new pieces.
I compose some new pieces on the Piano and upload 2 pieces first. So please enjoy these pieces of my so call "second album Abstraction" -> "Impro" and "Tone". :heh:

Just feel free to comment. :^.^