O.K. You do here what you practically do in the Poetry thread. ;)

You post lyrics that you may have written, and that way, find out what others think about your songs. I thought it'd be fun! ^_^ Well, here goes nothing! :heh:

This are my second lyrics in my life, so I'm exactly an expert. :sweat:


Never Have A Fear


-Marlon Ramos


Cure the plague
The venom errand
Brought to us
By careful demons
Chasing us till we couldn’t find ourselves

Holding out
My hands for you
Hold on tight
I’ll bring you back

So never have a fear
‘Cause I am always here
The water’s crystal clear
Don’t gotta run

Never have a fear
Never have a fear
Come on now!

So never have a fear
‘Cause I am always here
The water’s crystal clear
Don’t gotta run

When we cry
Oh, do we lie?
The falling rain
Will wash this pain away

So never have a fear
‘Cause I am always here
The water’s crystal clear
Don’t gotta run

So never have a fear
‘Cause I am always here
The water’s crystal clear
Don’t gotta run

I understand some parts seem a little confusing, such as "careful demons," but let's just say it's found a lot in some rock bands' lyrics, so... :heh:

I find you to...emotionally off. You dont like to hug your friends or bare touch them at all. So as to say:

Holding out
My hands for you
Hold on tight
I’ll bring you back

I find that impossible to believe...

I like the song I just don't feel it fits you...

Off Topic:

Man, you guys can at least write lyrics, let alone come up with the courage to lol..


i shuould learn how :lol:

I find you to...emotionally off. You dont like to hug your friends or bare touch them at all. So as to say:

Holding out
My hands for you
Hold on tight
I’ll bring you back

I find that impossible to believe...

I like the song I just don't feel it fits you...

You're the only one that knows that; plus, that's not 100% true. I'd do that for someone, such as friends.

EDIT: Also, it's a metaphor. :heh:

I wish I had someone to be my lyricist, haha . . but anyways, nice thread. Let me find some new lyrics to post, hmm . .

Wait, I thought you had someone who wrote lyrics for you?

That was different. I need someone full-time :heh:

Okay, I suppose I can post something I have written

"I gave you my word (you gave me yours),
You spilled my secret (I'll keep yours),
I gave you my heart (you turned it black),
If I gave you my hand,
would you cut the wrist?

Chorus
Okay, I'll play your game.
You be the tease,
I'll be the fool.
We'll see who gets hurt the most.

I knew you were trouble (from the start),
I tried to walk away (but you pulled me back),
Now your my addiction (and I can't quit),
So now I give you my hand,
please cut the wrist."

Chorus x2
"You've won again,
I am your pawn (and you are my queen),
Except your Anne Boleyn,
this time not falsley accused."

Chorus and Fade Off


It aint very long.. or rhymes... but I suppose it isn't suppose to.

Too emo for me. :bleh: But good other than that.

Well, some more lyrics I made! :heh:


The Laughter I Can’t Hear


-Marlon Ramos

Finding the light’s nothing but half the battle for our hearts (the light up there)
The blind soul sought his death for life
Lest worried thinking (in his head)

The things closing in
Are just your friends
Turned into enemies (your demon hazard)
The worst kind of torture
Keeps me ‘wake in this suffering
Of nothing seems the blood
That drips down to your pockets (your money to spend)
I still feel the same for you
Your rings of a many

The testament to your mortal

Never can we live forever
Eventually we find
What’s right for us
What’s all this for? (this darkness)

The lies fed by me and you
To those who keep us (in their threshold)
Seem out to haunt us out of here
Seem out to charm our lives (in molds of steel)

Nothing seems to be alright
I can’t think alone without you here
To judge my choices, my only ways (to find)
The words of those who keep us

To plant a tree that’ll last forever
Looks like the eyes that stare at us
Impossible to cease
Impossible to clean
Our black conscience
Lives up to our manikin (manipulation)

The cloth that drags here with us
Is stained from all the things we did
The love that kept sight on the nest (of a crow)
Nothing left here anymore

Living on the borderline
The edge of all, my dear mankind
Falling over is just as hard
As getting over the heavy chains (of us and they)

The resolution of our choice seems stranger
Than all the things we ruined to spoil
Than the world we find here today (it’s not what I wanted)
Than all our lives in this unwanted hellfire

Falling over
What we’ve trekked
The paths we threaded
In the light of night

We’re just the ones to bear
The agony of an entire world
The very people that sought us once
In here, we find the bright days

A memory
Of you (locked away)
Seems far away
Unreachable (I cannot find it!)

And then you came to me
And I accepted you (I accepted you)
And then the night had come (the night had come)
The time for all our deaths to

Come past by!

Hehe... I can get bored... :sweat:

O.o Wow Marlon....I liked Asuka's lyrics. Got a song for that?

Got a song for that?

Me? Well, I'm planning on making one. :heh:

Actually I was talking to Asuka but that is good too. XD

Away

Take me away
Away from here
To a place so simple
There is no fear

Hide me there
Away from the dead
Get these emotions
Ot of my head

Get me away
Away from him
Don't let me obey
Love's mindless whim

I need him
I need him here
I need him beside me
To banish my fear

I'm sooo concunfused
Don't know what to do!
I just...
Just want to be with you...

aww thats sweet sept ^_^

but kinda short...

so either the song has a lotta instrumental solos or maybe make one of the verses a chorus =]

lol That's what my friend said...I'll probably make it a combination of both....

Yeah... Too short... :unsure:

Actually I was talking to Asuka but that is good too. XD

LOL! Yeah, anyways I don't got a song for that... but if I ever join a band, i'll at least have some kind of lyrics. i thinkin of making it ryhme, but I'm too lazy at the moment.

The Thought of You

You are
So very far away
You had to go
But I wish you stayed.

I wish nothing more
Than to hold your hand
In mine
This pain I cannot stand

I want to feel
Feel you warm embrace
I want to feel your kiss
Feel it on the side of my face

(CHORUS)
The thought of you!
Oh, how I want to be with you
I want to hold you;
That’s what I want to do.

(Instrumental)

(Talking) Love: the one thing
I yearn to experience,
Above all others things…

Or maybe it is
Just your warm embrace,
That I need to know
I’m alive.

(Instrumental)

(CHORUS)

But then I saw you
Standing before me.
Oh, I must be dreaming,
Because I know this can’t be.

(Whispering & singing) But it’s you,
Oh, I’m so very glad it’s you
And now I’m lost in your eyes
As I my problems melt away
And I lay in your arms
Oblivious to the reality
That is tearing you and me apart

thats really good.kinda sad tho..:cry:. Make some happy lyrics! :lol:

I had originally intended it to be happy with a fairy tale ending...XD That didn't really work out though. I can make any happy thing sad, I think, with a sentence or a phrase to add to the happy statement. *shrug*

I don't do lyrics since I'm strictly going for classical music (which has only a handful of songs and most are lieder and I'm obviously not German). I have considered the possibility of vocal music in the form of cantatas, but since I'm no good, I haven't gotten very far on anything like that.

I Tried

i tried
my hardest
to keep your secret
but i had to say something
to someone
i coldnt let you do that
to bad i
lied to you
and told you i could make it better
its your fault
your the one that trusted me
so you cant balme me
for this
i no it was wrong of me
but i hope u can understand that
i tried to help ........
(instrumental solo)


(whisper) at least your still alive

That was... short... XD

yah so i could still add to it Mr. meany pants

*wipes tear*

"Feelings"

I've never been outside the room to gaze,
'cause I don't feel that I deserve the sunshine's rays.
The light was trimmed to fit my silenced gloomy days,
And it's then I realize my life was never placed.
When it's harder to believe that time can't wait:
That you won't realize the truth of a given space .
And you make boundaries you've always hoped to walk,
And if you happen to you see your always lost.
The love I gave to you, will always be
in myself cause I will always dream to be again

And time can only mend each other, we'll need together,
Our lives will always cross this seaming barrier,
Of an empty dream.
And we could only feel each other, we'd breathe together,
My heart will never seek to love another,
'Cause your my only wish.

I remember someone old once said to me:
"Love is truth to give and only to be freed."
But I was comfortable and warm inside my shell,
And never thought that hiding in my own vivid shell.
So is it better to tell and hurt or lie to save one's face?
Well I guess the answer is just hope to be in place.
I know I'm not deserving of your love from you right now,
But if your heart decides to mind,
my love will never bring you down cause I am always true, forever again

And time can only mend each other, we'll need together,
Our lives will always cross this seaming barrier,
Of an empty dream.
And we could only feel each other, we'd breathe together,
My heart will never seek to love another,
'Cause your my only wish.

I look inside my life just for a minute,
And I look over me for a reason that can only bring,
ease to my aching pain.
But nothing cures the hurt you, you bring on by yourself,
Hope for nothing, wishing something in return...

And time can only bring each other, we'll hope together,
Our lives will always grow in bliss to break,
Of an empty dream.
And we could only love each other, we'd have each other,
Our hearts will make us one to make another,
'Cause your my only wish.

Nice. The usual love story. Keep it up. ^_^

Sorry guys, but some of the lyrics are really redundant...words like demon, life, dream, love, pain, take {away} are so mainstream. The ideas are also just recycled again and again. Good lyrics are original in theme and vocabulary. I thought Tokoy's "the light was trimmed...gloomy days and vivid shell" were great but (I'm so sorry) squirrly_grl_99-I thought your lyrics were very bland...:\ Septermagick-I like how you incorporated the talking and some very cool phrases, but the overall feel is VERY close to "just another band"...

Your Soul Sells For Nothing When For Nothing You Sold Your Soul

Gotten through a mile
Without panting for the Devil’s breath
Waiting for an angel to come
Down and whirl past the sin
And by a hair’s breadth, the chant grew louder (louder)
Intersecting crossroads, dismember all the limbs

Of the ancient trees bleeding, bleeding kerosene
Through its pores, soaked in corrosion
Eldritch gravities and all the laws and
Pule like the slain saints

Transcend the mountains
Though your nerves have been raw
Forever to challenge the vacancy that’s been you
Gasping, breathing through a heart of coal

And as the renegade
Begins to reopen all the wounds
And your tissue rips
And your stomach acids raid at what’s left

Decaying somewhere in the ravine
Where sleeping lies a faith untouched
Yet flames lick at all the rites
I’m clean, babe, there’s no gun on me

All the weapons are in my head
Blasting corpses for my days to fade (into the dimness)
Infectious lesions run through my mind
I’m so fucking sick and tired of the stench of dying

Lose the leaking butane that rests on your skin
Graying, rotting right into your grave
Just one ignition is all it takes
So if you come to run this race

Though I want this fire to burn
Please keep anything else far off the road
Gasping, breathing through a heart of coal
I’m clean, babe, there’s no gun on me

Sorry for any morbid-ness... :heh:

Star on the Rise
- Mike Carpenter

I've only seen her face
Through the pixels on a screen
Only through the ink
Settled on a photo

But, how I long for her and me
How I wish to touch that cheek
And I know that when she's here for real
She'll run away with me

See that light in the sky
That is us, we will fly
And forever, together
Stars on the rise

We'll be on that screen together
All without a care
Even in the worst of weather
We'll always be there

Together here in love forever
Never without a light
We can make it through together
'Cause we're putting up a fight

See that light in the sky
That is us, we will fly
And forever, together
Stars on the rise

Who's to say our bond is feeble
I can see it, though it's faint
Why can't they see someday we'll meet
And be stars on the rise

Wipe those foul words from your tongue
Can't you see she's great
There's a place for her in my arms
But you, you're just dead weight

Because we'll be here together
Once and for all, forever
Never to be separated
Only to be elevated

See that light in the sky
That is us, we will fly
And forever, together
Stars on the rise


I know, it stinks. But it wasn't finished so I had to add a lot of verses right here.

LoL. Geesh. It wasn't bad. :P I especially like the intro verse... Good job, or something around there. :)

O.K. This is completely random lyrics about a cheap imitation of Parcheses that makes people turn into psychopathic serial killers. Muahaha. :)

Unless you actually try to see the meaning of it, that is... :heh: And yes, it does have a meaning.


Don't Try Imitating Parcheses (It Never Works)

And when we play this blackened game
Ruined from every starting name
And then you find there's something missing
But you can't tell which piece it is
The manual's been tearing off
This unreliably loose hinge
And life's a trick, it's all a game
Ruined from every starting name

Pick up a card, what does it say?
Are you to die? Are you to stay?
Unmoving lips read something fast
It's not your brain that makes it last

And as we make these funny faces
Laughing hard but reaping harder
And as these hands reach up to feel
A face that's never been too real
That wasn't part of the deal

My little blue guy's running there
Her pretty red girl hardly cares
But does that really matter?
It's just a game without a name

And when we play this blackened game
Ruined from every starting name
And then you find there's something missing
But you can't tell which piece it is
The manual's been tearing off
This unreliably loose hinge
And life's a trick, it's all a game
Ruined from every starting name

The rules state clearly that I win
I never cheated though you did
And now I'm waving at your corpse
Laughing hard but reaping harder

These were lyrics to an abandoned song project of mine:

Stars,
written by Jenni


As I look in to the sky,
I see the stars above,
when I turn I round,
I see your face and your smile,
When you are so close to me,
How can I tell you how I feel,
If this dream of love is mine,
I will I know if it's for real!


(Chorus 1)
As I close my eyes,
I see the stars,
Shining in the night,
Close you eyes and dream,
Of shining stars,
Sparkling so true,
as if to say,
that I love you!



When I see you here tonight,
will you hold me close to you,
will you tell me how you feel,
even when the night is blue,
Cant you see the way I am
cant you see the light
when the night gets cold and dark,
will you hold me tight!


(Chorus 2)
As i close my eyes,
I see your face
in glowing light
Close your eyes and see,
the shining stars,
sparkling so bright,
Shining in the night!





Today you are avoiding me,
today you seem so cold,
when I try to ask you why
the tears begin to show
. Now that you've found someone else,
I stop to take a deep sigh,
why couldn't you have told me so?
Why did you have to lie?

As I see you go,
I cant hold back the tears,

Remembering past years
why don’t you say goodbye?
You never said goodbye...

ooh why did you make me cry?
Please just tell me why...
How could you make me cry?...

As I close my eyes,
I dream of you,
you here with me
Close your eyes and dream,
Of shining stars,
Sparkling so bright
Shining through the night...
(Repeat Chorus 1&2)
(Fade Out)