This is my first composition. I am not finished yet, but I was wondering if any composers would give me some advice and comments on how it is and what it needs.

Okay, this song (like many starting compositions) needs strcuture. Try to create phrases, or musical sentences in a sense. It's also random. The melody was really awkward. A melody should be something that sticks into people's minds and occassionally takes them by surprise yet still makes sense to them. Also, work on chord progressions and stuff, because if you stay within the limits of the harmony with a certain chord progression, it will also limit your randomness in a sense (plus harmony is a huge part of composing, anyways :P ). Hopefully you understood the mambo jambo I just said. :heh: Oh, and you might wanna look into Music Theory, it'll help quite a bit.

Anyways, the song is very random, but just keep composing; you'll improve! :)

It has potential, it really does. What I would do to spice it up would be to( along with what marlon suggested) :
-Maybe in the section where the bass line comes it, instead of alternating from 2 different notes, you could maybe make it a nice chord progression
^-^ that would make it sound real nice. The chord progression really do make all the difference.

I'd love to hear it when you're all done though! ^-^ don't worry, it's not bad for your first try!!! ^-^

The beginning up till about :10 was my favorite part. If you can figure out how, put some dynamics in to make more excitement. I suggest starting quiet in the beginning to give those chords in the beginning some excitement. I would also suggest you slow it down a tad. I agree with the previous two posts, as well.

Thanks. I do have a book on music theory by the way, so I do know what you are talking about. I play tuba in my school's concert band, so I do not know a lot about melody.

My philosophy of 'melody' is that it should come naturally to the composer, as if you look at a huge rock and start to sculp it into a statue. The rock is music, and the statue is the melody.

The rock is music, and the statue is the melody.

The rock doesn't necessarily have to be sculpted into a statue, it can become many other masterpieces too. So what I am saying is that a piece doesn't necessarily have melodies, it could be something atmospheric, a formula (something related to atonal music or stuff like that) or basically anything that pleases you and other's ears. ;) But aside from that, it's better to start off with melody writing, as it's the simplest one and once you get hang of it, it's much easier for you to understand what you could do to music.

I don't know about just starting with melody, because bass lines seem to come out more naturally for me.

Hopefully this is a little bit better...

It gets a bit random for my taste after 0:10. You added dynamics but I think the sudden change at the start was a bit too much. I liked how you used an echo though. I have to say, like many others have, this song has great potential.

thanx, I was trying to make measures 7-18 a chorus type thing

Added on to my piece...


Sorry for double posting.