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maatkare
December 22nd, 2006, 11:41 pm
Yeah, this is my absolute first one, which I made YEARS AGO.

Only my family has heard it, only four know how to play an instrument, and only one (my younger brother) is the only one who can provide a decent comment on it!:(

I just want some feedback from others as well. Thank you.

ajamesu
December 23rd, 2006, 12:40 am
Ooh, a pretty name for a song :)

You know at places like 14-15? You shouldn't repeat the E chord. Instead, go for Esus and then E (or E7 might be a better chord). The triplets took me by surprise, and for me, it kind of ruined the flow of the song. But, then again, whenever I think of a meridian, I think of the Prime Meridian in Europe, then I think of Spain. The triplets give the chords a Spanish feel (well, the chords alone do that, but the way you're using them, it sounds more of a slow, reflective song). Even though it seemed bland and cliche, you pulled it off somehow, it's pretty good :) The simplicity made it enjoyable ^_^Oh, and the last chord seemed to want to be struck on the first beat of a measure, not the third, it sounds weird on the third.

maatkare
December 23rd, 2006, 01:01 am
Thanks for the suggestion. :)