This song is called I'm here.

I created it myself.

I hope you all like it!

Can't you see
I'm bleeding
Can't you hear
Me crying
Don't you know
I'm here

Forgotten, Mistreated
Frozen in time
I long for my own Heart
To fly

Can't you see
I'm bleeding
Can't you hear
Me crying
Don't you know
I'm here

Broken Heart
Lost for Hope
My fears came back
I wish for my own soul
To be free

Can't you see
I'm bleeding
Can't you hear
Me crying
Don't you know
I'm here

(^_^ I know, it isn't all that much but I am working on it.)

How do I put it...don't quit ur day job. The melody had okay places but the harmony was random. It's not the worst I've heard but lets just say I've heard better. The pause around 2:05 was way too long. such pauses are usually used to go from a very loud part to a very quiet part. It is an illusion composers use to make the listeners think that the orchestra had played so softly that they couldn't hear it because of the contrast from the section before.

Like KaitouKudou said:

It's not the worst I've heard but lets just say I've heard better.

In my opinion the melody was lacking in variety. Maybe that's the way you planned it to be. Perhaps you can add strings or something else on the background to support the melody with (sometimes) some faster notes. But that's just my opinion...;)

Your song kitagawa was utterly terrible to be honest. It was like ordering a ferocious guard dog for your home and getting delivered a poodle in a leather jacket instead.

The melody is ok, but u need to work on the rhythm and structure. The rhythm for the melody is too even, making it sounds like chanting. For the accompaniment, structure the rhythm and chords properly.

Structure needs work. Same with the harmony; weird chords here and there.

Remember these words in order, kitagawa_wolf: "You will never ever become a music composer"

Remember these words in order, kitagawa_wolf: "You will never ever become a music composer"

Stop with the stupid comments already. Ichigo's is for CONSTRUCTIVE criticisms, you're giving DESTRUCTIVE criticisms, people like you aren't needed for communities like Ichigo's. If you like to bash people so much, why don't you find a mirror and do it to yourself? I'm sure you'd have lots to say just looking at yourself. <_< I'm pretty sure Noir7 stated what would happen if you continue with your insults.

I wasn't making insults sweet-heart. My friend told me about this music website so I came here to listen the songs and judge them, that's what I do in here. I don't hack, spam, or claim the songs in here.

I don't care if you listen to them or not, but the thing is: you're here to bash people. What you said to Kitagawa-Wolf was extremely inhuman and rude. Just because someone isn't 'good' to your standard, doesn't mean they suck. By the way, if you keep saying these, what evidence do you have that you're better than them? Do you compose? If you do, I'm pretty sure you wouldn't like others to say 'you suck, go home and grow some hair' (and that's LIKE what you're saying to people right now). Get a life and have some respect, you aren't the god here.

Remember these words in order, kitagawa_wolf: "You will never ever become a music composer"

<_< There's a difference between criticisms and constructive criticisms...